You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of females who worked in four
country
namely Korea, Change to a plural noun
countries
Afghanistan
, France and USA
from 1985 to 2005.
Correct article usage
the USA
It is clear that
all countries except Afghanistan
increase
their percentage of working women until 2005. Wrong verb form
increased
In addition
, the amount
of employers in Change the quantifier
number
Afghanistan
start
to decrease after 1995. At the start of the period, the United States had the most workers and Change the verb form
starts
at the end
stands in its position. However
, Afghanistan
had the lowest percentage throughout the period.
Considering the line graph, the USA started its journey with 45% and reached its peak of 65% in 2005 and Korea and
exhibited a similar trend. Correct word choice
apply
Although
, only Correct word choice
However
Afghanistan
was
significantly decreased from 40 to almost zero, Unnecessary verb
apply
where
other countries gradually and slowly climbed.Correct word choice
whereas
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words afghanistan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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