The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of intake of
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar in a meal, which in excess causes health problems.
Overall
, it can be concluded that
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the
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sodium
and
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saturated fats
forms
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the major components of dinner
whereas
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snack items
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the major portion of added sugars.
However
, our dinner and lunch are mainly comprised
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sodium
. As per the information represented in the chart, the first meal of our day is very light with about 14% of
sodium
and identical proportions of saturated fats and added sugars.
However
,
sodium
intake is maximum in dinner, with about 43%,
in
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it serves to be the minor component of pastime foods. In
addtion
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addition
to
sodium
, the
last
meal of our day
also
contains saturated fat(37%) and sweeteners(23%). The mid-day meals have
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percentage of all
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three nutrients ranging from 20% to 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentage
  • nutrients
  • sodium
  • saturated fat
  • added sugars
  • typical meals
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • snacks
  • consumption
  • excess
  • health implications
  • comparison
  • trend
  • pattern
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