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The table below gives information about the USA's top exports in 2021 and the percentage change with 2020. The bar chart shows the percentage of the USA exports sent to the UK between 2010 and 2020.

The table below gives information about the USA's top exports in 2021 and the percentage change with 2020. The bar chart shows the percentage of the USA exports sent to the UK between 2010 and 2020.
#information #usa #exports #percentage #change #bar #uk
The table
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 below gives information about the USA's top
exports
 in 2021 and the proportion change with 2020.The bar chart provides the percentage of the USA
exports
 sent to the
UK
 from 2010 to 2020.
Oveall
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Overall
, it can be seen that In 2010 the highest figure
of
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 USA
export
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exports
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sent to
UK
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the UK
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 .
In addition
 ,electronic vehicles were most highly ranked in 2012 by value.
To begin
 with, electronic vehicles had the top number approximately 28 billion.
While
,
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 petroleum had the lowest figure exactly 17 billion .
Moreover
, Both gold and jets had
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same rate . It is interesting to note that
exports
which
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sent to
UK
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 in 2010 were
the
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 highest rate
a
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round
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 60 per cent. Comparatively
in
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2020 had the lowest rate about 45 per cent.
Furthermore
, from 2012 gradual decrease
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until
 2020
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average
40
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 per cent. In conclusion, it appears that different
proportion
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proportions
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in
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exports
 ASA to
UK
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the UK
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 over
a
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 period
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2010 to 2020.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • percentage change
  • data presented
  • timeframe
  • highlighting
  • significant
  • analysis of trends
  • patterns
  • correlation
  • demand
  • potential reasons
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • social reasons
  • speculation
  • export landscape
  • global events
  • pandemic
  • influenced
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