The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart represents the percentage of five different industries in Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a prediction for 2029. There were three visible trends in the year 2009. Finance
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experienced a slight increase from 32% in 2009 to 37% in 2009, and it is predicted to reach 42% in 2029.
On the other hand
, food processing and oil, coal and gas had increased from 11% and 27% in 2009 to 22% and 32% respectively in 2019 and they are forecasted to come back to their initial figure in 2009. Meanwhile, tourism
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experienced a downward trend as it began at 27% in 2009 and declined to 21% in 2019 before being estimated to have the same percentage as it was in 2029. Manufacturing had declined from 22% in 2009 to 17% in 2019, and it is going to have
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decrease to 5% in 2029. In conclusion,
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the five sectors, tourism and manufacturing experienced a decline.
In contrast
,finances tended to increase, followed by food processing, oil, coal and gas, which had mild variations.
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