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Letter 2 There have been some problems with the Internet service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the Internet company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

#internet #service #reliability #area #two #weeks #manager #company
Dear Sir/Madam, I am your client and I
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 internet services every day.
Last
 two weeks I had problems with the internet speed and web resource www.youtube.com. I working with social messengers and
cheking
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checking
 new
videofiles
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video files
 which upload new users, but
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 I wrote
early
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last
 two weeks when I opened youtub.com I saw
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the message
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 «access denide».
Also
 when I try to open
another
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other
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web sites
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websites
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 it
did
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 too slow and
this
 issue
give
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 me many uncomfortable situations. I
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 my
devises
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,
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and all
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internet
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the internet
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 cables and did not see
defects
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any defects
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. So I think that problems in your
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devices
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 or cables. Please, depart one
engenier
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engineer
 to my
adress
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address
 and I hope he will find problems in my situation. Thank
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 for attention and will send me the answer. Best regards, Vladimir Belitskii
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task achievement
There are some grammatical and spelling errors that could be improved. For instance, use 'I have been experiencing problems' instead of 'I had problems', and 'access denied' instead of 'access denide'.
coherence cohesion
The paragraph organization can be improved by separating the description of the problems from the explanation of how they are affecting you.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent use of verb tenses for better readability and clarity.
task achievement
The letter covers all three points requested in the task, showing a good understanding of the task requirements.
task achievement
The tone is generally polite and appropriate for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly used and appropriate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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