L. The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

L. The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram demonstrates a chained process of how foods in the United States are produced, using an example of cow’s
milk
.
Overall
, the
milk
production chain illustrates a linear process, and there are five main processes: production, processing, distribution, preparation and consumption.
First,
cow’s
milk
is collected from farms, it is usually carried by ship via the river or ocean to a local processing centre.
Then
, it is processed to make it safe for consumption before being packaged and distributed to other places.
Next,
the raw products are carried from a distribution centre by truck to either retail shops or directly to restaurants. The
milk
purchased by local consumers is generally used at home cooling and shared within the households.
On the other hand
, the
milk
carried to restaurants is used in cooking by professionals and
finally
served as dishes and consumed by people. In summary, as the example of cow’s
milk
demonstrates, agricultural products in the United States are carried by ship to factories and distributed to restaurants or retail shops after being processed at factories.
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