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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph given shows the
population
 rate in
cities
 in several
southeast
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Southeast
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asia
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Asian
Asia
 nations which were
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2040. In general, more and more people from all these four countries
lived
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live
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 in
cities
 and in the future the percentage will continue to rise steadily. Since 2000, Malaysia has been the country in which
residence
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residents
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 in
cities
 are the crowdest. It will reach a peak of around 80% of
total
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the total
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population
 which are citizens. In
the
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second place will be Indonesia, the
population
 rate of it
rocketted
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rocketed
 dramatically from 14% in 1990 to 50% in 2020, and will be 60% in 2040. Both
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand's
percentage
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percentages
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 fluctuated, they all grew but went down in 1990.
However
, they slowly rose and nearly
a
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half of their
population
 will live in
cities
 in the future.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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