The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The bar chart provides information about the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak another language in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the highest percentage of British students is able to who speak
languages
other than English and Spanish,
while
the smallest percentage has two other
languages
, no other
languages
, French and German. In terms of the largest proportion of British students who speak Spanish only made up just under a third in the year 2000,
while
this
increased by just over a third after a 10-year period.
In contrast
, another language made up less than a fifth in 2000,
this
grew to merely 5% in 2010. Two other
languages
comprised 10% in the year 2000,
furthermore
this
was unchanging in 2010,
while
German too unchanging in both
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merely 10%. The smallest proportion of no other language made up a fifth in 2000, compared
this
comprised one in ten after a 10-year period,
whereas
French made up less than a fifth in 2000 but in 2010
this
declined to 5%.
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