The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job

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Dear

sir

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/madam, I would like to inform you that, I have seen an advertisement regarding the job vacancy for summer breaks.I believe that

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apply

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I am the right person to apply for

this

job. I am Saniya Sunny,

lives

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in Kerala,

Iam

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I am

from

middle class

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family and My father is a retired police officer .

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I am

the one and only daughter of my parents. I completed my Master's degree in Library sciences in 2017.I have

5years

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5 years

experience in relevant

field

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. Recently,I

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working as a Librarian in Punjab .I got an award

forbest

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for

librarian

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a librarian

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in 2017. My father had an accident,he is on

bedrest

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bed rest

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now.I need to arrange some money for my father's treatment.Nobody is there to take care of him.My

work place

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is located in longer distance,so ,it is not possible for me to travel far.

This

opportunity is near

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my home,so easily I can access to

home

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the home

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. Hope you can understand my current situation and expect

positive

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a positive

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response from you. Yours faithfully Saniya Sunny

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Clear introduction of yourself and explanation of your current situation.

coherence cohesion

Appropriate greeting and closing statements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

162 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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