The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job

Dear
sir
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Sir
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/madam, I would like to inform you that, I have seen an advertisement regarding the job vacancy for summer breaks.I believe that
,
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apply
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I am the right person to apply for
this
job. I am Saniya Sunny,
lives
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live
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in Kerala,
Iam
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I am
from
middle class
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family and My father is a retired police officer .
Iam
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I am
the one and only daughter of my parents. I completed my Master's degree in Library sciences in 2017.I have
5years
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5 years
experience in relevant
field
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fields
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. Recently,I
am
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working as a Librarian in Punjab .I got an award
forbest
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for
librarian
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a librarian
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in 2017. My father had an accident,he is on
bedrest
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bed rest
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now.I need to arrange some money for my father's treatment.Nobody is there to take care of him.My
work place
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workplace
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is located in longer distance,so ,it is not possible for me to travel far.
This
opportunity is near
to
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my home,so easily I can access to
home
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the home
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. Hope you can understand my current situation and expect
positive
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a positive
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response from you. Yours faithfully Saniya Sunny
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Clear introduction of yourself and explanation of your current situation.
coherence cohesion
Appropriate greeting and closing statements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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