The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job

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Dear

sir

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Sir

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/madam, I would like to inform you that, I have seen an advertisement regarding the job vacancy for summer breaks.I believe that

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apply

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I am the right person to apply for

this

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job. I am Saniya Sunny,

lives

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live

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in Kerala,

Iam

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I am

from

middle class

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family and My father is a retired police officer .

Iam

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I am

the one and only daughter of my parents. I completed my Master's degree in Library sciences in 2017.I have

5years

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5 years

experience in relevant

field

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fields

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. Recently,I

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have been

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working as a Librarian in Punjab .I got an award

forbest

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for

librarian

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a librarian

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in 2017. My father had an accident,he is on

bedrest

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bed rest

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now.I need to arrange some money for my father's treatment.Nobody is there to take care of him.My

work place

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workplace

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is located in longer distance,so ,it is not possible for me to travel far.

This

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opportunity is near

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my home,so easily I can access to

home

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. Hope you can understand my current situation and expect

positive

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a positive

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response from you. Yours faithfully Saniya Sunny

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coherence cohesion

Ensure your paragraphs are clearly defined and focus on one main idea to improve coherence.

task achievement

Consider using more formal language and polishing your grammar to improve clarity and professionalism.

task achievement

Clear introduction of yourself and explanation of your current situation.

coherence cohesion

Appropriate greeting and closing statements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

162 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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