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The table below shows the number of full-time students in India who studied at various universities in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22

The table below shows the number of full-time students in India who studied at various universities in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22
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The given data compares the number of Indian
students
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 attending six tertiary institutions in the UK in two school
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year
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years
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: 2020/2021 and 2021/2022.
Overall
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, an upward trend in
students
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 coming to the UK to pursue higher education is observed, with BPP
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university
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University
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remains
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remaining
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 the most popular destination in both school years,
while
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 Sheffield
University
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’s popularity witnesses a significant rise. Regarding
to
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the 2020/21 admission period,
highest
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the highest
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numbers
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number
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 of
students
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 attended BPP
University
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, recording 3,505
students
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. That was followed by The
University
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 of
Greenwhich
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Greenwich
 and Coventry
University
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, seeing approximately 2400 attendees.
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, Anglia Ruskin
University
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 and the
University
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 of Leicester had above 1,000
students
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,
while
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 only 815 Indian
students
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 chose Sheffield
University
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, making it the least chosen option. Moving to
2021
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the 2021
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/2022 school
year
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, 2,900 more
students
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admitted
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were admitted
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 to Coventry
University
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 compared to the previous
year
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, making it the hottest spot for tertiary education.
As well as
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this
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, most of the other schools witnessed an increase in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of admissions, ranging
1,215
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from 1,215
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 to slightly above 2,000
students
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more
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apply
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that
year
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,
whereas
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 Sheffield
University
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 had the most dramatic rise, with
almost
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an almost
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 190% increase in comparison with the
year
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 before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, year, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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