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Write a letter to the restaurant manager to organise a party. Why you want to throw the party What special arrangements you will need Any relevant questions

#restaurant #manager #organise #party #arrangements #questions
Restaurant Manager, Dear
sir
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Sir
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, Hope you are
good
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well
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.
Actuallly
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Actually
,
last
 week I was engaged, So that's why I wanna give a party to my all friends and relatives. Can you organise a party
.
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?
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Moreover
, I want some special arrangements like
unique
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a unique
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 welcoming way and all special dishes
serve
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served
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 first.
Furthermore
, How much money will
cover
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be covered
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to
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for
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this
 party with all
facilities
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the facilities
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 like free internet, Parking and without
this
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these
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 facilities. Hope I
recieve
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receive
 a good reply from you. Thanks Gursewak
singh
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Singh
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Coherence and Cohesion
To improve the logical structure, the letter should have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use linking words to smoothly transition between the points.
Task Achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the question in detail and provide a full and complete response.
Task Achievement
The writing tone could be more professional. Phrases like 'I wanna' can be replaced with 'I would like to.'
Task Achievement
You've included all necessary parts: the reason for the party, the special arrangements needed, and the questions for the manager.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a pleasant and friendly tone, which is welcoming.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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