The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and percentages per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and percentages per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart depicts the consumption of five portions of
fruit
and vegetables in British
people
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people's
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daily life between 2001 and 2008 in
percentage
.
Overall
, There are different percentages among groups of
people
which are
men
,
women
and kids. The
most
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highest
percentage
of vegetable consumers are
women
. Especially, in 2006 the
percentage
was about 35 per cent compared to
men
that
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who
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consume
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consumed
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fruit
just less than 30 per cent.
In contrast
, children
is
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the group of
people
that less consume fruits and vegetables.
In
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2001 to 2003, the figure
of
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for
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fruit
consumption
percentage
of children was just only about 10% per cent compared to
women
and
men
. To summarise, Youngers who
lived
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live
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in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
is
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are
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the group of
people
who
ate
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eat
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less
of
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apply
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fruit
and vegetables than
women
and
men
.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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