The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and percentages per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart depicts the consumption of five portions of
fruit
and vegetables in British people
daily life between 2001 and 2008 in Change noun form
people's
percentage
.
Overall
, There are different percentages among groups of people
which are men
, women
and kids.
The most
highest Change the adjective
apply
percentage
of vegetable consumers are women
. Especially, in 2006 the percentage
was about 35 per cent compared to men
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
consume
Wrong verb form
consumed
fruit
just less than 30 per cent. In contrast
, children is
the group of Change the verb form
are
people
that less consume fruits and vegetables. In
2001 to 2003, the figure Change preposition
From
of
Change preposition
for
fruit
consumption percentage
of children was just only about 10% per cent compared to women
and men
.
To summarise, Youngers who lived
in Wrong verb form
live
United
Kingdom Correct article usage
the United
is
the group of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
who ate
less Wrong verb form
eat
of
Change preposition
apply
fruit
and vegetables than women
and men
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on
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