The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below demonstrates the number of
women
and
men
who passed their driving test in one Asian country from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
women
passing
have
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has
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always been higher than
men
within the
30 year
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30-year
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period, with
the
Correct article usage
apply
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women
also
achieving the highest
percentage
of driving tests passed ever recorded on the table. In 1980,
women
achieved approximately 50% on the chart , compared to
the
Correct article usage
a
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mere 30% of
men
.
This
difference would fluctuate in the next periods, but the
women
's
percentage
of driving tests passed
were
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was
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always higher compared to
men
. In 1990, the number of
women
passed increased by about 4%,
whereas
the
men
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number of men
show examples
increased by almost 10% shortening the gap down to 14% only. Between 2000 and 2010, the
percentage
of
men
that
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who
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got their driver's licence was roughly 50%, and
this
number did not change in 2010.
Women
experienced a
suddne
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sudden
surge in numbers, achieving nearly 70%, the highest
percentage
on
this
bar chart. Over the next 10 years, the numbers would decrease slowly, ending at 65% in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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