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The charts below illustrate which of 3 fast food restaurants were the most preferred amongst teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and predictions for 2027. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below illustrate which of 3 fast food restaurants were the most preferred amongst teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and predictions for 2027. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The four Pie diagrams represent the
popularity
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 of three fast food outlets amongst
teenagers
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 in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and their forecast for 2027 . In an overview , one country’s second choice is the other
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 least
favourite
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 and
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 versa . The choice of
teenagers
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 will change in one country by 2027 .
Meanwhile
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 it will remain the same in the other nation with reduced
popularity
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 . In Vietnam ,
Burger
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 King was the first choice of
teenagers
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 in 2017 at around 53 % . Immediately followed by MC Donald’s at around 43% .
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KFC
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 was the least popular . By 2027 the
popularity
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 of MacDonald’s will increase by around 15 % to become the youngster’s
favourite
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 . Though
Burger
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 King will move to
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second place, its
popularity
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 will be more than six times that of
KFC
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. In Indonesia, McDonald’s was the
favourite
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 in 2017 with nearly
three quarters
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of
teenagers
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 opting for it . The second
favourite
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KFC
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 was way behind and close to
Burger
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 King . In 2027 though McDonald’s will remain in the top , a portion of its previous majority will be taken over by
KFC
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 in 2027 .
This
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 will make
KFC
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 more than 3 times ahead of
Burger
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 King
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Vocabulary: Replace the words popularity, teenagers, favourite, burger, kfc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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