The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie graphs give information about the percentage of particularly high school graduates in Australia who had a job, did not have a job or had
further
education in three years including 1980 9090 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that people who completed their education had the highest level in the first year.
Moreover
, Australians who were employed were the highest in the second and the third year. The ratio of unemployed was the lowest in the whole given years.
To begin
with, the proportion of individuals who worked after high school in Australia was
initially
40 per
cent
, and it had a significant increase in 1990 to 50% and had a slight rise in 2000 to 55 per
cent
. Meanwhile, the number of unemployment experienced fluctuation, it stood at 10 per
cent
in 1980, and it continued to increase slightly in 1990 to 12 per
cent
,
while
it had a drop in 2000 to 80 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, the rate of graduates who had a
further
education witnessed a significant decline in 1990 from 50% to 38 percentage.
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