The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The graph demonstrates the proportion of
people
born in
Australia
and who were born outside
Australia
living in different places namely cities, countryside, and towns over a 5-year period, starting in 1995.
Overall
, the bar chart witnessed several changes after 5 years. It is
also
clear that the number of citizens who were born outside
Australia
and live in cities remained at the highest rate throughout the given course. In 1995, the rate of
people
who were born in
Australia
living in cities stood at around 50% and grew slightly to over 60% in 2010,
while
the figure for
people
who were born outside
Australia
was considerably higher than
it
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, with 60%
initially
and rose drastically by 20%, reaching 80% in the 5 following years
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percentage of citizens who were born in
Australia
and lived in towns and rural started out at approximately 20% and 35% respectively, after which suffered a dramatic drop and recorded having the same figure, nearly 18%. Similar patterns were
also
seen in the rates of
people
who were born outside
Australia
in towns and rural areas, with 18% for the former and 40% for the latter, both recorded in 1995.
Then
, those figures reduced sharply to under 15% and 10% respectively
at the end
of the period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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