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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the funds spent on
books
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 in four European nations (Germany, France, Italy and
Austria
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) in the period of 6 years from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 all the countries experienced an upward trend in
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
books
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. The Germans spent considerably throughout the period and
Austria
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 spent the least amount on
books
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initially
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. in 1995, Germany spent the most on
books
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 at approximately 80m$
while
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 France and Italy spent between around 50m$ to nearly 55m$.
Austria
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 remained in the
last
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 position and spent the least amount in the beginning at around 30m$. Between 1997 and 1999, Germany, France and
Austria
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 saw
a
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steady growth in book purchasing and the figure for each reaching around 90m$, 60m$ and 40m$ respectively. looking at low spenders, Italy and
Austria
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 remain the lowest spenders of all the nations listed in the chart. Italy in the beginning had more sales compared to
Austria
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,
then
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 between 1997 to 1999, its sales dropped to approximately 50m$
whereas
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 the sales in
Austria
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 rose to 40m$. Interestingly,
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 the Austrians remained at the bottom for the most period, in 2003, the book purchases sharply increased and overtook Italians by a significant margin.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, austria, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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