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Band 5.5

The graph below shows the consumption of fast food in UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph below shows the consumption of fast food in UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The line graph shows information about how people consumed fast food in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 over two years from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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, what
stand
Change the verb form
stands
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 out from the graph is in 1990 the consumption of hamburgers
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 a peak to be 550 grams.
According to
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 the data given on the number of
people
Add a comma
people,
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how
Correct word choice
who
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 ate hamburgers increased
dramaticaly
Correct your spelling
dramatically
 over the period
while
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on the other
Linking Words
hand
Add a comma
hand,
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 fish and chips consumed remained steady over the two years. Moving on to the remaining lines, between 1970 and 1980 the amount of pizza rose slightly but
on
Change preposition
in
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 the next
year
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year,
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 the amount increased gradually to
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
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about 290 grams.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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