The graph below shows the consumption of fast food in UK from 1970 to 1990.
The line graph shows information about how people consumed fast food in
UK
over two years from 1970 to 1990.
Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, what stand
out from the graph is in 1990 the consumption of hamburgers Change the verb form
stands
reach
a peak to be 550 grams.
Wrong verb form
reached
According to
the data given on the number of people
Add a comma
people,
how
ate hamburgers increased Correct word choice
who
dramaticaly
over the period Correct your spelling
dramatically
while
on the other
hand
fish and chips consumed remained steady over the two years.
Moving on to the remaining lines, between 1970 and 1980 the amount of pizza rose slightly but Add a comma
hand,
on
the next Change preposition
in
year
the amount increased gradually to Add a comma
year,
be
about 290 grams.Unnecessary verb
apply
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