The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The chart represents the total number of
employment
rate in several hospitality-related industries between 2009 and 2019.
In 2009, accommodation industries, such
as hotels had the most workers, which was 1 million employees, followed by sports
Correct article usage
the sports
industry
, which had 300 thousand people
working. The food industry
was placed third,
which had 700000 workers, while
the cultural and travel
industry
had the least employment
. However
, it seemed that the cultural industry
had more employees rather than the travel
industry
.
Nonetheless
, in 2019, the hotel reached 1200000 people
working for them. As for the food sector, the employment
rate increased by 70% as well as
sports
Add an article
the sports
industry
. The number of workers in the culture and travel
industry
also
went up with the proportion of people
working in it, which was higher than people
working in the cultural sector.
To sum up
, over a decade the total number of employment
had
increased in every tourism-related Wrong verb form
has
industry
. However
, when being seen regularly, people
prefer working in the hotel, sports, and travel
industries to working in the travel
and cultural sectors.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, industry, people, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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