The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares total employment in thousands across five different tourism industries between 2009 and 2019.

To begin

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with, the food

sector

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experienced a very drastic increase, starting from the absorption of 283.400 workers with an addition of 80000 people in 2019, making it the

sector

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with the largest absorption of workers during that period. The same high increase in employment was

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captured in the sports

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, which gained 61000 employees

at the end

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of the presented year.

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, the travel

industry

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also

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gained a high amount of workers from 60.9 in 2009 to 114.2 thousand in 2019. The least absorption of employees in the tourism

industry

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went to the hotel

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, which only added more than 6000 employees.

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, the culture

industry

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presented a decline in total employment, with a fall of 5.4 thousand in 2019. All in all, it could be seen that all fields presented a gradual increase in the number of employments, except for the culture

sector

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which had a decrease in the number of people.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

172 words

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The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of living a number of different places during your childhood years??

Some food travels long distance from the producers to the consumers. Some people believe that it is better for the environment and economy if people only buy food produced by local farmers. Do you think the advantages of this idea would outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local custom and codes of behavior. do you agree or disagree

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