The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income
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The chart gives information regarding Education, Job rates and average annual wages of
people
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in eight countries.
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, there is no significant
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correlation
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between qualifications and employment rates .
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there is more than 10 times difference in the annual
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of the
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amongst countries .
Norway
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stands out as top in all
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aspects The employment rate has a variation of around 24% amongst the given nations where
Norway
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stands first at 74.8% and Greece at the lowest
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50.8%. Austria,
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and
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the UK
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all have more than 70% of
people
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with jobs . The difference between qualified
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within these 7 nations
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around 20% . It does not seem to correlate with the job rates since Portugal with only 22.9% educated
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has 63.9% employment .
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there is a huge variation in yearly
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between these nations . Bulgaria has a yearly
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of only 3,332 pounds
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in
Norway
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it is 41,483 . Portugal, Latvia, Greece and Bulgaria all belong to 4- digit yearly
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category
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, income, norway with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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