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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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As can be seen, the given pie charts show information about 5 different types of
energy
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production
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 in France in different two years (1995 and 2005).
overall
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, we can notice that the percentage of all
energy
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production
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 increased in 2005 except for petrol which decreased.
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, it appears that the percentage of
production
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 of coal was the highest in both years,
while
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 the least were nuclear and other kinds of
energy
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. The three biggest
energy
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production
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 were coal, gas and petrol , 29.80, 29.63 and 29.27 respectively in 1995. In 2005 Coal and gas increased to 30.93 and 30.31 per
cent
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while
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 petrol decreased to 19.55 per
cent
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. The least
energy
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 sources were nuclear and other
energy
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 productions, As the percentage of nuclear was 6.40 in 1995 and increased to 10.10 per
cent
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 in 2005.
furthermore
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, other sources of
energy
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 doubled from 4.% per
cent
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 to 9.10 per
cent
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 in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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