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A building company is planning to build new houses on some land near where you live and has asked the people to give their comments. Write a letter to the manager of the building company and - Say how you heard about the plan of the building company - Give your opinion of the plan

#company #houses #land #people #comments #manager #plan
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my views regarding the development of new houses near my home, which will bring stunning looks to our town,
as well as
 new revenue to the
company
. The advertisement
of
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 new apartments was displayed by your
company
's staff, which makes me curious to know more about it.
According to
 my opinion, there should be two car parking in the new buildings, so, nobody gets
trouble
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their
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 vehicle.
Moreover
, there should be two elevators, because
sometime
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 people need to wait for hours when one is not working.
Lastly
, we are hoping
fo
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 the best development from the
company
, as,
this
company
 has built around 300 buildings and
everyone
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 apartment owner is so satisfied
from
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 the services of your
company
. I hope
next
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the next
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 project will
also
 be well developed. Yours faithfully XYZ
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logical structure
Ensure each paragraph conveys a single idea clearly. Consider breaking down complex ideas into multiple paragraphs for better readability.
complete response
While the response is mostly complete, ensure that all aspects of the prompt are covered in detail. For example, adding more specifics on how you heard about the plan could improve clarity.
suitable writing tone
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Phrases like 'two car parking' and 'everyone apartment owner is so satisfied' could be restructured for better clarity.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and polite greeting and closing, which is appropriate for the context.
task achievement
The writer effectively expresses their opinions and provides constructive suggestions for improvement, demonstrating engagement with the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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