Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Other believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Generally,
university
students
learn
subjects
which are considered
as
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useful for their
future
job positions during
study
time. And these
subjects
are always planned by universities for
students
.
This
argument that whether
students
should be able to select their
subjects
in given fields of
study
by themselves,
according to
their own passion and enthusiasm, is both supported and refuted by many.
This
essay will analyse both sides of
this
argument before declaring a position. On
one
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hand, many are of the opinion that
students
need to be able to choose their own
subjects
at
university
.
For example
, personally, I have always got my best scores in my favourite
subjects
during my
bachelor
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degree.
Conversely
, I have got my worst scores in
subjects
that I hated.
Therefore
, it makes it clear that when
students
elect their own
subjects
, they can go for the ones that they are interested in.
This
passion brings along a lot of motivation. And the resulting motivation causes their
future
career success in society.
While
,
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this
motivation contributes to improved
future
results, it is unlikely that all
students
have adequate insight into the
future
job market needs.
On the other hand
, many people are of the belief that
students
have to
study
subjects
that are viewed as essential by
university
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.
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top American universities as an instance. We noticed that they have already selected a rigid number of
specifics
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subjects
, which
are
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proved to be the most appropriate
subjects
to be studied for
students
through years of experience.
Thus
, it is vividly observed that forcing
students
to
study
particular
subjects
is essentially associated with both
students
' success and
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prosperity in the
future
.
Hence
, it is of paramount importance for
university
authorities to interfere with the
subjects
' selection pressure. All in all, there has always been
debate
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a debate
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between two sides of
this
argument regarding the
students
' permission to select their own
subjects
.
Whereas
,
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it might be seen as a favourable idea for
students
to be able to choose their own subject, I strongly believe that
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university
faculties are the better
agent
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to make informed
decision
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about these
subjects
. Eventually, it is suggested that universities provide
students
with the best possible
subjects
, considering their own personal
taste
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to some extent as well.
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task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are fully developed and supported with specific examples or evidence. While some examples are given, more detail can strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitioning smoothly between paragraphs and ideas to enhance logical flow. Some transitions feel abrupt and can be improved for a better cohesive structure.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the essay, providing a solid structure for your arguments.
task achievement
The essay offers a balanced discussion of both views, which shows a thorough understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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