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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar chart compares the
percentage
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 in one Asian country who passed their driving
test
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 between 1980 and 2010. Based on the chart, the
number
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 of
women
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 who passed their driving
test
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 is significantly higher than that of
men
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. In the case of
women
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, the
number
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 of
women
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 passing their driving
test
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 rose every ten
year
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years
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 from 1980 until 2000. It starts from
near
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nearly
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 50% in 1980,
then
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 gradually
reach
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reaches
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 more than 50% in 1990. The highest
number
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 recorded is near
to
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70% in the year 2000.
However
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, that
number
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 slightly declined in the 2010 record.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
men
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 who passed their driving
test
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also
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have
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 an upward tendency as
women
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 do. But the level
of
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starting
percentage
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shown
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showed
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lower
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a lower
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percentage
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 than
women
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, which
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is noticable
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noticable
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noticeable
in 1980 that the
percentage
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 only recorded less than 30% of
men
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 passing the driving
test
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. The
number
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 sequentially
rise
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rose
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 to
near
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nearly
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 40% in 1990, and
near
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nearly
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 50% in 2000. Meanwhile, in
the
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2010, no increased
percentage
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 was recorded so the
number
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 remains stable.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, women, men, test, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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