You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of people holding a
science
qualification
in two countries, Malaysia and Singapore, and are classified by level of education; namely Master's
degree
, Bachelor's
degree
, school examination, and no
qualification
.
Overall
, more than half of each country's citizens do not hold any
science
qualification
,
which
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and
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Malaysia's proportion outnumbers Singapore's number.
On the other hand
, individuals in both countries
are holding
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hold
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Master's
degree
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degrees
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as
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at
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the same amount.
In addition
, holding
Bachelor's
Correct article usage
a Bachelor's
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degree
in
science
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the science
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field for
Singaporian
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Singapore
double
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is double
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the figure for
Malaysian
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Malaysia
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. Regarding no
qualification
in
this
major, Malaysia's percentage stands at 65%,more than Singapore's ratio by 5%,which displays approximately
one thirds
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one-third
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holding
science
qualification
in different
catagory
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categories
.
For
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At
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school
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the school
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level, both countries experience almost one
thirds
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third
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,just different by around 5%. Interestingly,
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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who graduate
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
in
science
account for one in ten population,being just
a
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apply
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half of
Singaporian
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Singaporean
graduate students.
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