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The bar graph illustrates the fluctuations in the growth rate value of average properties in Algeria, China, and Argentina throughout 2007 and 2010. Overall, while China showed an abrupt rise in their property price over the period analyzed, Algeria experienced a consistent decrease and Argentina exhibited a variation pattern. China began 2007 being the last position with only 2% growth in regular property prices, however, it exhibited a significant increase of around 4.3% in 2008, keeping the rise pattern in 2009 with just above 5.0%, until it reached over 6.0% in 2010. In contrast, Algeria, which led the percentage rise in 2007 with just above 6.0%, experienced an important and gradual decline to 4.5% in 2008 and afterward reached approximately 3.0% in 2009 and 2010. Argentina, on the other hand, exhibited fluctuations throughout the period, beginning with an increase of 3% in percentage growth priced in 2007, then peaked almost 5% in 2008. Subsequently, it experienced a significant drop to almost 1% in 2009, so it rose again to under 2.5% in 2010.

The bar graph illustrates the fluctuations in the growth rate value of average properties in Algeria, China, and Argentina throughout 2007 and 2010. Overall, while China showed an abrupt rise in their property price over the period analyzed, Algeria experienced a consistent decrease and Argentina exhibited a variation pattern. China began 2007 being the last position with only 2% growth in regular property prices, however, it exhibited a significant increase of around 4.3% in 2008, keeping the rise pattern in 2009 with just above 5.0%, until it reached over 6.0% in 2010. In contrast, Algeria, which led the percentage rise in 2007 with just above 6.0%, experienced an important and gradual decline to 4.5% in 2008 and afterward reached approximately 3.0% in 2009 and 2010. Argentina, on the other hand, exhibited fluctuations throughout the period, beginning with an increase of 3% in percentage growth priced in 2007, then peaked almost 5% in 2008. Subsequently, it experienced a significant drop to almost 1% in 2009, so it rose again to under 2.5% in 2010.
The bar graph illustrates the fluctuations in the growth rate value of average properties in Algeria, China, and Argentina throughout 2007 and 2010.
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 China showed an abrupt rise in their property price over the period analyzed, Algeria experienced a consistent decrease and Argentina exhibited a variation pattern. China began 2007 being the
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 position with only 2% growth in regular property prices,
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, Algeria, which led the percentage rise in 2007 with just above 6.0%, experienced an important and gradual decline to 4.5% in 2008 and
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 reached approximately 3.0% in 2009 and 2010. Argentina,
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 peaked almost 5% in 2008.
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, it experienced a significant drop to almost 1% in 2009, so it rose again to under 2.5% in 2010.

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