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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The statistic provides information on the electric
production
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 and
consumption
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 of the leading
countries
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 in 2014.
China
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 and the United
States
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 are the two major contributors to electric
production
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 and
consumption
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.
China
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's electric
production
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 was 5,398
kWh
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, nearly equal to the combined output of all other
countries
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 except the United
States
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. The United
States
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 ranked second with an electric
production
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 of about 4,099
kWh
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 in 2014.
However
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, the electric
consumption
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 in these
countries
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 was slightly lower than their
production
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, with
China
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 consuming 5,322
kWh
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 and the United
States
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 3,866
kWh
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. Russia, Japan, India, and Canada followed the United
States
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 in terms of electric
production
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 and
consumption
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, each recording above 500
kWh
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. France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea recorded under 500
kWh
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 for both
production
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 and
consumption
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. In conclusion,
China
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 and the United
States
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 are the top two
countries
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 significantly contributing to electric
production
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 and
consumption
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, followed by Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea.
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, all these
countries
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 produced more electricity than they consumed, except for Germany.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, countries, china, states, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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