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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data about the access to public
transportation
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 in one country in 2016 was not only different types of groups but
also
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 the location of citizens. The information had been calibrated in terms of percentage. After analysis, it can be observed that the 0-15
age
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 groups of adolescents prefer to use public transport (which was almost 40%) in large metropolis rather than another
center
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 ( approx. 13%).
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, the 16-30-year-old youngsters were using public shipping in large
cities
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 which was 55%,
whereas
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 in other areas were 28%, it seems when they were growing, they would like to move to capital
cities
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. Probing
further
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, the 31-45 life people were using
transportation
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 in other municipality decreased and
also
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 in large
cities
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 it peaked, it was increased by 60%. Moving ahead, when their
age
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 was 46-60, the percentage of other residents was almost identical,
in contrast
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, it dramatically decreased in large
cities
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 by almost 35% compared to the previous
age
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 group.
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,
in
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61-75
age
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 old citizens preferred to use public
transportation
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 in other countries slightly increased to 20% but in large
cities
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 which was significantly dropped to under 10%. Eventually, the 76+
age
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 people were using public
transportation
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 in other
cities
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 at almost 8% but in capital
cities
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which
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 rose slightly.
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, it can be seen conspicuous from the explained aforementioned tabular chart which expounds that maximum interest can be seen in large places, where the 31-45
age
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 people prefer to
used
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 public transport, whilst less preference was given to 61-45
age
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 group peoples. So, the using of public
transportation
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 in other downtown fluctuated in different
age
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 groups.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in contrast".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, age, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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