The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph represents the total
number
of
students
from Iran, Greece, and Turkey at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009. In 2005, Sheffield University had 20
Turkish
students
and 40
Iranian
students
. Both numbers gradually increased throughout the years.
However
, in 2008, there was a slight decrease in the total
number
of
Iranian
students
by 10 pupils. Yet, it managed to keep growing. In 2009, there were 160 Iranians enrolled and 120
Turkish
.
On the contrary
, the
number
of Greek
students
dramatically decreased since 2005. In the beginning, there were 180
students
and after two years, there were only 60 pupils left. Throughout the years, its
number
had declined to 40
students
in 2009.
On the contrary
, the total
number
of
Iranian
and
Turkish
students
was growing each year with
Iranian
students
dominating the enrollment, followed by
Turkish
students
.
On the other hand
, the Greek
students
were becoming lesser and lesser.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the contrary".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, turkish, iranian with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrolled
  • Enrollments
  • Trend
  • Steady increase
  • Initial increase
  • Decline
  • Sharp increase
  • Peaking
  • Noteworthy comparison
  • Contrasting trends
  • Period
  • Given period
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