Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of wether the course is useful to an employee. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university.?

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Universities
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are
the
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in charge of producing
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a numbers
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numbers
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of graduates carrying the
knowledge
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they learned. Many
people
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argued
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that
students
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who
went
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to
universities
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must acquire the skills and
knowledge
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they need in their
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career
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in the
future
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.
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,
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universities
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the universities
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main role is to just provide
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general
education
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regardless of its importance to
students
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who attained their
education
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. There are
people
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who are uncertain of their
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career
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careers
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and just want to attend
universities
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just to obtain degrees or courses for them to have
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reserved in the
future
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. They
acquired
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general
education
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that is
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useful whether in the
career
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that they want in the
future
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or not. Undecided
students
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will opt to
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in college without really thinking
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about what
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their
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should be and
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just taking their safe
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as a reservation but still helping them in the
future
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. For them, though, it's their
course
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, they still
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obtained a
obtained
degree with
knowledge
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. Each
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universities
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has its own prospectus of whatever
course
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or
field
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they chose. With
this
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matter, an
education
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that they must conduct should have a specific area of learning and at the
time
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same time
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learning general
knowledge
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that every
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students
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student
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must have. There's no
course
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that provides all
skills
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the skills
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or
knowledge
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that they
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are supposed
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to have in their
career
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.
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for
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this
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is in
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the medical
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field
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, nurses and doctors must have
its
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their
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specific
field
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of learning their scope.
To conclude
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, many
people
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are undecided and still want to obtain degrees. These are the
people
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that don't need a specific
education
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their
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for their
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career
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in the
future
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.
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,
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there are some courses
such
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as in
medical
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the medical
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field
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that must go through these subjects or
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field
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for them to succeed in their
career
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.
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