The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
The graph demonstrates the unpaid working
hour
by married Fix the agreement mistake
hours
men
and women
in different categories, for example
, with different numbers of children
.
To begin
, married women
's unpaid working hours
rise when they have more children
. The unmber
of unpaid working Correct your spelling
number
hours
of women
with three or more children
is double of women
without children
, which is as high as 60 hours
per week. Meanwhile, there is no obvious difference in men
's unpaid working hours
when they have more children
. The numbers remain at 17-20 hours
per week.
At the same time, married women
's unpaid working hours
is
far beyond that of married Correct subject-verb agreement
are
men
's. While
the number of diference
is higher than 3.5 times when they have three or more Correct your spelling
differences
children
in their family.
In conclusion, married women
's average hours
of unpaid work is
much higher than married Correct subject-verb agreement
are
men
's hours
. When the family has more children
, the unpaid work of women
increase
, Change the verb form
increases
whereas
the unpaid work of married men
did not shown
Change the verb form
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