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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts compare data about the proportion of people who worked in 3 different jobs in 4 various countries in 2 diverse times( 1980 and 2010).
Overall
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, in both years
industry
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 was an important sector in all countries
instead
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 of
China
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, in which
agriculture
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 was a crucial thing, the number of people who worked in
industry
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 was increasing, but other things had decreased trend.
According to
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 the 1980 plot, in 1980, the main country which had a lot of workers was
China
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;
moreover
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, the most popular work was
agriculture
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 with 70% workers;
then
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Services
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 and
industry
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 respectively 50 and 40%. Germany, the second country for employees, was the best country in manufacturing because it had 60% ;
then
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services
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 had 10% less than the first
one
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;
however
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, the lowest
one
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 was farming at 5%. The third
one
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 was the USA, having the same motivation as Germany, so,
industry
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,
services
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 and
Agriculture
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 had 52, 48, and 9 per cent. The
last
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one
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 was Japan which had 49, 40, and 11 per cent for
industry
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,
services
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 and
Agriculture
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. The 2010 graph shows all countries except
China
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 had a jump in
industry
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for example
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 Germany, Japan, and the USA roughly 20, 20,and 30 per cent climbed;
although
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 other sections had nearly 10% for
services
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 and 2% for
agriculture
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 fall.
Nevertheless
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,
China
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 had a 20% and 30% decline in
agriculture
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 and
services
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, but
industry
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 was equal in the past.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, china, agriculture, services, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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