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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph shows the proportion of
Australian
exports
 to Japan,
US
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the US
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, China and
Inda
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India
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 from 1999 to 2012. In
comparision
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comparison
 to the line graph of each country given, China has a massive
increase
of
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in
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Australian
exports
 after the year 2000
whereas
 India appears to have the lowest
percentage
 of
exports
 among these 4 countries but the
percentage
 starts to slowly
increase
 after the year 2000. Japan
however
 started with a higher
percentage
 of
Australian
 export which dropped drastically during the
years
 1990 to 1995. The
percentage
 of
exports
 in Japan gradually decreased from 20% to 13% during the
years
 1995-2012, showing little to no
increase
 in
exports
in
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apply
show examples
between these
years
. A
similiar
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similar
 drop in
Australian
exports
 was seen in the US during the
years
 1990 to 1995, but the US increased their proportion from approximately 8% to 13% by 2000. A gradual
decerease
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decrease
 was faced again by the US but rose again after 2010. So comparatively China has had the most
increase
 of
Australian
exports
 over the
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, increase, percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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