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The chart below show the propotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to aenglish,in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below show the propotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to aenglish,in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant
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The given two charts show
students'
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 number in British
university
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universities
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 with additional
language
 skills to English
overall
 10 years from 2000 to 2010 The rate of foreign
languages
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language
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 speakers is very wide and underwent
to
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apply
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some changes. In 2000 20% of
students
 spoke only in English ,without knowing
extra
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the extra
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language
 .
This
 number dipped twice in 2010. The
per cent
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percentage
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 of
students
 with
knowing
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know
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 the German
language
kept
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remained
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 stable ,
10
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at 10
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%. The French
language
 speakers became less in 2010 ,diminishing from 15% to 10%.
However
,contrary to French , communication in Spanish and other
language
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languages
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 increased by 16% and became 35%,
20
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and 20
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% ,respectively.
Also
,we can notice the modifications among the
students
 ,who
posessed
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possessed
 extra two different languages .
Such
students
 consisted 10% in 2000 opposite to 2010,when their number was 15%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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