task1 the graph below gives iformation on the numbers of participants for different activities (film club -martial arts -amateur dramatics -table tennis -musical performances) at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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The line
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provides key information about the figures of Correct your spelling
graph
people
who take a patr
for some activities at Correct your spelling
part
social
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a social
center
in Australia specifically in Melbourne Change the spelling
centre
in
2000 to 2020
First of all, there were Change preposition
from
not
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no
people
joined
musical performances in 2000 and 2005. In 2010 the number of participants increased to 10 Correct pronoun usage
who joined
person
. Change to a plural noun
people
Secondly
, table tennis and amateur dramatics in 2000 were alomst
15 and 25, respectively. It is Correct your spelling
almost
also
important to highlight that, both table tennis and amateur dramatics were th
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the
seem
number of Correct your spelling
same
people
who joined the club
in 2010, at 20 person
.
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people
However
, martial arts in 2000 was around 35 person
. Fix the agreement mistake
people
In addition
, martial arts peaked in 2010. Moreover
, film club
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clubs
alomst
the trend steady Correct your spelling
almost
in
over the 20 years. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, film club
decreased in 2010 than Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
jumbed
in 2020.
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jumped
jumbled
To sum up
, we could say that, film
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the film
club
was the most
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apply
activitie
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activity
people
enjoyed comparison with musical performances.Submitted by joudaalhammadi on
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