task1 the graph below gives iformation on the numbers of participants for different activities (film club -martial arts -amateur dramatics -table tennis -musical performances) at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

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The line

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graph

provides key information about the figures of

people

who take a

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part

for some activities at

social

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center

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in Australia specifically in Melbourne

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2000 to 2020 First of all, there were

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people

joined

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who joined

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musical performances in 2000 and 2005. In 2010 the number of participants increased to 10

person

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people

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Secondly

, table tennis and amateur dramatics in 2000 were

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almost

15 and 25, respectively. It is

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important to highlight that, both table tennis and amateur dramatics were

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the

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same

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number of

people

who joined the

club

in 2010, at 20

person

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people

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However

, martial arts in 2000 was around 35

person

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people

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In addition

, martial arts peaked in 2010.

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, film

club

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clubs

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alomst

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almost

the trend steady

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apply

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over the 20 years.

Furthermore

, film

club

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clubs

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decreased in 2010 than

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jumped

jumbled

in 2020.

To sum up

, we could say that,

film

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the film

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club

was the

most

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activitie

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activity

people

enjoyed comparison with musical performances.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

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Children can learn different things about the world by watching films. What kinds of things do children learn by watching films? Are all these things good for children?

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Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many food and drink prodcuts contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary Products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?