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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the fish and meat consumption in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Three kinds of meat were included, they were chicken, beef and lamb. The consumption per
person
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 per
week
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 of all kinds of food except for chicken experienced a significant decrease during the period. Among
four
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the four
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 types of food, beef plunged
in
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at
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 the most considerable speed, first bounced between 1979 and 1986 between 210 and 230
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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, and
then
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slided
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slid
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in
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at
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 a
dramatically
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 speed,
finally
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reached
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 100 in 2004. Lamb
also
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 experienced a similar trend, starting at 150 in 1979, and kept
droping
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dropping
 in the following years,
reached
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reaching
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 50
grams
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 per
person
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week
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 in 2004.
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 but not least, fish was always the least one, and it declined
in
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 a much slighter speed, from 58
grams
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 in 1979 to 48
grams
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 in 2004.
Chicken
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The chicken
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 was
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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similar
as
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to
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 lamb but went in the opposite direction. It kept soaring quickly during the
peroid
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period
 and reached the top of around 250
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, week, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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