The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
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The diagram illustrates the average earning per person in dollars for two age categories of under 18 and over 60, and the proportions of the
people
living in poverty in the states of California
, Utah, and Florida
in the US.
Over all
, it is noticeable that Correct your spelling
Overall
California
has the largest group
of poor people
, and the richest average individual, while
Utal has the least one. In addition
, Utal has the biggest group
of youth under 18 and the least elders over 60, and contrast
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in contrast
Florida
has the least young people
and most old inhabitants.
The average income per person in California
is 23000$, followed by Florida
at 22000$, and utal is the lowest one at 17000$ individually. The percentage of people
living in poor in California
is 16%, followed by Florida
and Utal at 12% and 95 respectively.
When it comes to age, the group
under 18 accounts for 28% in Utal, 17% in California
, and 16% in Florida
. However
, Utal has only 8% old people
over 60 years old, while
the same group
in California
occupied 13%, and 23% for Florida
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