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The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of unemployed individuals aged from 15 to 24 in Poland, Italy, Hungary, Germany, and Denmark in 2005. Units measured by
percentage
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.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of unemployed young
people
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 was higher than
overall
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unempolyment
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unemployment
employment
 in all countries. There was a significant difference in the
percentage
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 of the Poland
people
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. In Poland, the
percentage
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 of unemployed young
people
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 was
a
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apply
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two times more than
overall
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 unemployment about 35% to 15%. Italy had 20%
for
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of
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 young
people
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 to under 10%
for
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apply
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overall
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. Hungary had a similar
percentage
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 for
overall
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 unemployment
while
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 the young
people
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 had just above 15%. In
Germany
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Germany,
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 there was not a big difference between the two groups the
percentage
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 of unemployed
people
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 aged 15 to 24
about
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was about
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 15% ,
while
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 the other group was just 10%. Denmark had the lowest
percentage
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 of unemployment for both groups,
the
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with the
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 amount of unemployed young
people
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about
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at about
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 6%
while
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 other groups
under
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were under
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 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • youth unemployment
  • overall unemployment
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • aged between
  • economic conditions
  • educational system
  • vocational training
  • long-term impacts
  • policy changes
  • job training programs
  • disparity
  • national unemployment rates
  • European countries
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