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The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table depicts the ratio of the
income
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 spent by
adults
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 and kids in the United Kingdom in 2005 on 4 popular activities .
Due to
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 the information most of the
income
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 was spent by the kids compared to the
adults
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 .
According to
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 what is shown , the
music
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 is consumed significantly by a huge ratio by the children .
adults
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 spent about 30% of
the
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income
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food and women spent more than men by about 10 per cent.
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, they spent most of the money on
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food and electronic equipment .
Income
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 spent by the children was larger than the
adults
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 on
music
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 and videos by a large ratio and boys spent more than girls on the videos
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 to the
music
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income
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 was mostly by the girls .
To sum up
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 we could say that , most of the
income
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 was spent by the children especially on
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music
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whereas
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adults
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 spent more on
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food than the kids .

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, adults, music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of income
  • spending habits
  • significant differences
  • trends
  • necessity
  • preference
  • lifestyle
  • expenditure
  • allocate
  • consumer behavior
  • contrast
  • notably
  • on the other hand
  • account for
  • percentage of income
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