The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
table depicts the ratio of the income
spent by adults
and kids in the United Kingdom in 2005 on 4 popular activities . Due to
the information most of the income
was spent by the kids compared to the adults
.
According to
what is shown , the music
is consumed significantly by a huge ratio by the children . adults
spent about 30% of the
Change the word
their
income
on the
food and women spent more than men by about 10 per cent. Correct article usage
apply
Also
, they spent most of the money on the
food and electronic equipment .
Correct article usage
apply
Income
spent by the children was larger than the adults
on music
and videos by a large ratio and boys spent more than girls on the videos in contrast
to the music
income
was mostly by the girls .
To sum up
we could say that , most of the income
was spent by the children especially on the
Correct article usage
apply
music
whereas
adults
spent more on the
food than the kids .Correct article usage
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, adults, music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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