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The chart shows the change in forested land in different regions of the world over time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the change in forested land in different regions of the world over time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the variation in forested
are
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areas
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 in ten different
region
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regions
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period
 between 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of
changing
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change
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fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 over time, East
Asia
 had
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a widen
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widen
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widened
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 transformation,
it
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and it
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 was above the average
from
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of
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 other regions.
By contrast
, Central
America
 was
the
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apply
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extremely low whole
period
. Looking into more detail, the data
divided
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is divided
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 into three different
period
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periods
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.
First,
from 1995 to 2000,
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the Carribean
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Carribean
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Caribbean
 and East
Asia
 were the highest
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, it was above 0.5%.
While
,
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apply
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 North
America
 remained
0
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at 0
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%.
However
, Central
America
 was the lowest, it was hit -1.5%. South
Asia
 and North Africa between -0.5% to -1.
Second,
during
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from
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 2000 to 2005, more than 1% of changing in forested happened in East
Asia
. It remained the biggest change,
by
contrast
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 Europe was only slightly 0.1% and Central
America
 slightly above -1%.
The
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last
period
,
in
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from
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 2005 to 2010, Central
America
was
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showed
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huge
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a huge
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 amount of
changing
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change
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 it was closely -1.5 and North
America
 slightly above 0.1%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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