The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram illustrates a way of shaping
glass
containers.
Overall
, the process of shaping
glass
has nine phases. It is started by
put
Wrong verb form
putting
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glass
in
machine
Add an article
the machine
a machine
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with
Change preposition
at
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a high temperature ,
then
use
Wrong verb form
using
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different container moulds to shape the
glass
,
then
Correct word choice
and then
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cooling it before is checked by a staff.
Finally
, there are two boxes one for the
packging
Correct your spelling
packaging
and the other for waste. First five phases,
glass
Correct article usage
the glass
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is put in
hot
Correct article usage
a hot
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machine with 105 Furnance,
then
the hot
glass
put
Add a missing verb
is put
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in
mould
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the mould
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1,
after
Correct word choice
and after
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that, it is pressed by a specific tool.
In addition
, that container with a thick wall is put in mould 2 to shape the
glass
and
makes
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
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space for the air's movement. In the
last
four stages, after
glass
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the glass
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is shaped, it is heated with 482
Kiln
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Kilns
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.
Then
, it is put for cooling
with
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at
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25
degree
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degrees
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for 60 minutes. After that, a staff ensure it is well
shaping
Wrong verb form
shaped
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,
then
Correct word choice
and then
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the
last
stage they put it
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
Correct article usage
a packging
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packging
Correct your spelling
packaging
packing
box or waste box.
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