WRITING TASK 1 This graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1

This graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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graph tells the cities’
population
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percentage
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in four Asian
countries
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including the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020 and forecasts for 2030 and 2040. Out of four
countries
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, Malaysia and Indonesia
had facing
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the same trends. These nation’s cities’
population
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faced gradual
increased
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throughout the year starting from 30% and 10%
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respectively
and forecasted 80% and 40%
for
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of
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the nation’s
population
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will stay in the city in 2040. Different from those
countries
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, the Philippines metropolitan’s citizens fluctuate from year to year especially from 1970 to 2010, but different trends will
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from 2020 to 2040 which
country’s
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the country’s
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population
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will
starting
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to
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to more than twice of first year’s
population
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. Following three other
countries
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, Thailand faced a stagnant slope of
population
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starting from 19%,
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, it eventually uphill starting from 2020 and based on the forecast it will have a significant increase in the next 20 years to 35%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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