The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
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The given diagrams depict the proportions of
men
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and
women
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aged 60-64 remaining in the workforce in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, there was a noticeable decline in
employment
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rates
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among both
men
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and
women
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in
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age group over the thirty-year period. In both 1970 and 2000, the percentage of
men
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aged 60-64 who were still working exceeded that of
women
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in the same age bracket. Specifically, Japanese
men
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had the highest
employment
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rates
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, with 85% still holding jobs in 1970, followed by
Belgium
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, Australia, and the USA with 79%, 76%, and 73% respectively.
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, by 2000, there was a significant decrease in these figures, particularly evident in
Japan
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, where the percentage dropped to 19%.
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, the USA,
Japan
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, and Australia experienced declines to 55%, 74%, and 47% respectively during the same period. Turning to female
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rates
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, Japanese
women
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had the highest proportion still employed in 1970, at 43%,
while
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Belgium
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had the lowest, with only 8%. By 2000, despite a slight increase in the USA and Australia, both
Japan
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and
Belgium
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saw decreases in female
employment
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rates
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, with
Japan
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at 40% and
Belgium
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at 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, employment, rates, belgium, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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