The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph depicts data about the proportion of visitors to four different
tourtist
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tourist
attractions in Brighton, a city
of
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in
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England over a 30-year period. At first glance, it is visible that almost
places
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all places
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experienced an upward trend with the exception of
art
gallery
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galleries
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and
Pier
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Piers
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. Notably,
Art
gallery
had the most significant change among all categories, Looking at
Festival
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the Festival
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, in 1980, it had
outnumbered
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an outnumbered
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figure with
aroung
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around
30
percentage
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per cent
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of visitors to
this
place, but it almost had no clear difference between 2010 and 1980, their numbers are 30% and 28% respectively.
Furthermore
, regarding the second-highest figure, the Pavilion, it had approximately under 25% in 1980 but went up incredibly to the peak of roughly 48% in 1995 prior to decreasing by 15% in 2010.
On the other hand
, the visitor numbers in
Art
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the Art
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gallery
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galleries
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it
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apply
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went up and down to reach 20% by 1990 before undergoing a drop of around 12% in 2010
,
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and
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apply
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being the lowest figure.
Finally
, nearly 10%
visitors
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of visitors
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entered
pier
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the pier
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in 1980 and it
start
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started
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a modest fluctuation, surpassing
art
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the art
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gallery
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galleries
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at 15% in 2005 and
reach
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reaching
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over 20% by 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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