the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below illustrate an industrial region inside Norbiton town and the development future plan of its site.
There
is
a significant change which Wrong verb form
was
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
factories
translocated into new one
and houses and living resources were built as well. The transformation Correct pronoun usage
ones
including
Wrong verb form
included
factories
elimination Change the noun form
factory
become
housing areas Wrong verb form
became
development
equipped with various public facilities.
Looking Correct word choice
and development
firstly
to the west
of the roundabout, which stands in the middle
of the area
. The detail
transformation of the Replace the word
detailed
west
side
can be described as follows. The current middle
roundabout are
surrounded by Change the verb form
is
factories
that will be annihilated in the future. A river crosses from the west
to the east, where right next to it, there is a
farmland in the upper northside. There will be a slight change in Remove the article
apply
Correct article usage
the farland
farland
, which is a bridge Correct your spelling
farmland
Farland
will
be built across the river to connect the roundabout to the farmland and equipped with a residential Correct pronoun usage
that will
area
. Moreover
, on the south side
, there is a road runs
from Correct pronoun usage
that runs
west
to east, which is connected from one area
to another and the roundabout with a middle
roundabout that will be placed in the junction. The shop later will be built which is located in the west
-east area
next to the middle
roundabout.
On the other hand
, in
the east Change preposition
on
side
, the current factories
will transform into housing areas with some communal amenities like school
in the far right and Correct article usage
a school
playground
right below the river. The medical centre is planned to be located between the two roundabouts on the eastern Correct article usage
a playground
side
of the layout.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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