The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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, I am going to start with Belgium men there is a huge

difference

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between 1970 and 2000 in 1970 it was way higher and it is the

second

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highest of all by the age of 79. Next is the USA 1970 is still higher than 2000 it is a18 year

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. Moving on to Japan is the highest country and the lowest

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being only 9 years

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, in men, we have

Australia

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with the

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biggest

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of 29 years.

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Australia

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has the biggest

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in men it is quite different in the women's chart

Australia

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has the

second

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lowest

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of all which is an ironic

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between the two genders, you may think if

Australia

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has the

second

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lowest

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then

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who is the actual lowest | will happily tell you that it is Belgium.

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, there is not anything else noticeable or worth comparing so I would gladly end

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report.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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1 paragraphs

158 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

employment rate
percentage
trend
significant change
overall employment
societal changes
economic conditions
government policies
compare
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individual country analysis
increased/decreased
similarities and differences

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