The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Firstly

, I am going to start with Belgium men there is a huge

difference

between 1970 and 2000 in 1970 it was way higher and it is the

second

highest of all by the age of 79. Next is the USA 1970 is still higher than 2000 it is a18 year

difference

. Moving on to Japan is the highest country and the lowest

difference

being only 9 years

difference

Finally

, in men, we have

Australia

with the

second

biggest

gap

of 29 years.

Hence

Australia

has the biggest

gap

in men it is quite different in the women's chart

Australia

has the

second

lowest

gap

of all which is an ironic

difference

between the two genders, you may think if

Australia

has the

second

lowest

gap

then

who is the actual lowest | will happily tell you that it is Belgium.

Lastly

, there is not anything else noticeable or worth comparing so I would gladly end

this

report.

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