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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table gives information about the number of temporary migrant
workers
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 in Australia, New Zealand, the United Kingdom and the United States in the years 2003 and 2006. Data about
number
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the number
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 of
workers
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 per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006 is
also
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 provided.
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, it can be seen that the United
Stated
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States
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 had the most temporary migrant
workers
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 in both years
whereas
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 New Zealand had a lesser total of
workers
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. There has been a drastic increase
of
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in
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workers
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 in the United States, spiking from 577,000 to 678,000 in a span of three years. Here, we can
also
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 see that the lowest per 1,000 people in 2006 is the United States and the highest is New Zealand. A similar sudden rise of
the
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apply
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migrant
workers
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 in the US is
also
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 seen in the United Kingdom, with over 137,000
workers
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 in 2003 to 266,000
workers
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 in 2006. Australia's data
of
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on
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number
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a number
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 of migrant
workers
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 has drastically risen, introducing 67,000 new
workers
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 in 2006.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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