The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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60 to 64 years old employment in the year 1970 and 2000 in Belgium , Correct pronoun usage
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the USA
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and Australia .
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Japan
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men
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women
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in
Belgium
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in Belgium
men
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mekes
up 79% Correct your spelling
made
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women's
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in women's
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American
men
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women's
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women
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per cent
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number
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women
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percent
43% . Change the spelling
per cent
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Autralia
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Australia
man's
are 76% Fix the agreement mistake
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women
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16
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are 16
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men's
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women
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women's
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apply
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decreased
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, USA Linking Words
womwn
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women
number
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rise
to 39%.
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To sum up
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men
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has
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have
low
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a low
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percent
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percentage
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apply
comperes
with 1970. Correct your spelling
compared
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women
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percent
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per cent
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