The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrient, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts

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that three unhealthy types of

nutrient

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nutrients

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contained

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in breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks. When we look at the green colour, it is clear to see that a large amount of nutrient

sodium

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, saturated fat and added sugar is in dinner. Looking at details, the highest percentage

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sodium

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and saturated fat is in dinner, it contains 43% and 37% respectively.

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, the highest nutrient proportion is added sugar

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in snacks 42%.

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figure in

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and Saturated fat

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14% and 21%. When we look at lunch,

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and saturated fat

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relatively similar

proportion

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proportions

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, but added sugar only has 19%. The percentages in three

nutrient

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nutrients

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in breakfast are roughly

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, around 16%.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

117 words

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrient, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead to a breakdown in family relationships and communication. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. What might be the cases? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

Some believe that politicians are the most influential people in the world, while others believe scientists are the most influential. Which side do you agree with and why? Provide specific reasoning for your answer.