The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph above shows the percentage of the two genders aged between 60 to 64 in
employment
in four countries in 1970 and 2000 .
Overall
/ the men
chart Change noun form
men's
display
that the Correct subject-verb agreement
displays
employment
numbers got
down Verb problem
went
however
the women
Change noun form
women's
employment
did not changed
a lot .
The Belgium men got a huge drop from 79 Change the verb form
change
employment
to approximately 20 person
but USA and Japan had a slide by around the fifth Change to a plural noun
people
also
the Australian men got down by 30 employment
.
On the other side the women
chart shows that Change noun form
women's
Belgium
Correct your spelling
Belgian
women
got
down by only one woman Verb problem
went
also
Japanese women
almost got
down by 2 Verb problem
went
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
in addition
both Australian
and Correct your spelling
Australia
USA
increased by a little over ten Correct article usage
the USA
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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